Sprays season misty
Showers; hugs mother Nature
Her kids in love-arms;
Chill misty showers,
Wake Nature’s kids snug in mom’s
Wake Nature’s kids snug in mom’s
Hugs on
Night-mattress.
Turns water God, the
Magician to strings of rains
And showers of mist.
Swirls God wand; turns ha!
Water to Pretty dew-pearls
Sleet, mist, hail and fog.
Mist-showers, curtains
raise; camouflages dawn beings,
Figures are all vague.
Wears Nature, the lass
Garbs with look
misty-foggy;
Sure stylish she is.
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For https://haikuhorizons.wordpress.com/2015/05/
For https://haikuhorizons.wordpress.com/2015/05/
Really so much work put in, and a lot to say in those words - I strongly urge you to break away from the chains of 5 7 5 and go for the meaning first and form second
ReplyDeleteActually I want to do that, but viewers remind me that haiku is of 5+7+5 syllable pattern. Thank you very much for the suggestions.
DeleteA beautiful series inspired on Basho's ' misty showers'
ReplyDeleteThank you,Kristjaan.
DeleteExcellent poem. I liked the lines
ReplyDelete"Turns water God, the
Magician to strings of rains
And showers of mist."
Thank you,Partha,
DeleteGreat series Rudraprayaga
ReplyDeleteHmm makes one feel like out in the open in the hills on a cold, chilly, misty winter somewhere in the mountains.
ReplyDeleteO! That itself is a poem. Thank you.
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem few words say lot
ReplyDeleteThank you,sm.
ReplyDeleteThank you,sm.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you turn rain into a magical thing through your poetry. Lovely, especially the last stanza! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you,Rohini.
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem. Loved reading it.
ReplyDeleteThank you,SG.
ReplyDeleteThank you,SG.
ReplyDeleteMisty showers are beautiful :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you,Amrit.
ReplyDeleteloved the idea of the misty showers, Rudraprayaga :)
ReplyDeletethanks for dropping by on Drishti :)
Thank you,Archana.
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful... Felt the mist!
ReplyDeleteThank you,Loco.
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