Tuesday, April 9, 2013

A Chain of Time



         Haiku


Dawn

Dawn opens door of dark.
The first gleam sweeps the sky clean.
Skylark is on songs.

Noon

Crushes heat, creatures in
Earth-furnace and things all  turn ablaze.
Noon boasts of  his might.

Dusk

Dusk paints surroundings
In all hues with vermillion more. 
Back to huts farmers are.
 
 Night

Swallows Sea  ball of fire.
Night,unable to witness  switches
Light off, goes sleeping.
sarala

17 comments:

  1. Very nice and one is able to visualise

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  2. beautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.

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  3. beautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.

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  4. Like the compilation. And do remember to polish the words after writing. You may find more apt words and inclusions.
    Perhaps the last stanza, I guess could have been better.
    And may be the "back to the huts the farmers" too could have been polished for more feel.
    Please note these are my observations and i'm not an expert in poetry.

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  5. Thank you for the suggestion.I am n't that rich in lexical part.Actually my verses are odes without much thought of rhythm,beats,rhyme scheme (Of course rhyming words are there) etc.Whatever comes to the mind takes the shape of words as per time availability.In haiku syllable restriction makes me avoid articles.

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  6. and with these chains events form, and life goes on and on :)

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  7. Nice Haiku. I can only appreciate it but never even try it. It seems so complicated. However, I love to read Haiku composed by others.

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