Tuesday, April 9, 2013

A Chain of Time



         Haiku


Dawn!

Opens Dawn door of dark.
Sweeps the sky clean the first gleam.
Skylark is on songs.

Noon!

At the peak of his
might, Noon keeps Earth ablaze. Breeze
 lovingly strokes her.

Dusk!

Paints surroundings, Dusk
in crimson and scarlet; back
 to huts are farmers. 

Night!

Sea swallows Sun; in
 much anguish switches off light
And  shuts her eyes, Night.
………………………………………………..sarala

17 comments:

  1. Very nice and one is able to visualise

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  2. beautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.

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  3. beautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.

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  4. Like the compilation. And do remember to polish the words after writing. You may find more apt words and inclusions.
    Perhaps the last stanza, I guess could have been better.
    And may be the "back to the huts the farmers" too could have been polished for more feel.
    Please note these are my observations and i'm not an expert in poetry.

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  5. Thank you for the suggestion.I am n't that rich in lexical part.Actually my verses are odes without much thought of rhythm,beats,rhyme scheme (Of course rhyming words are there) etc.Whatever comes to the mind takes the shape of words as per time availability.In haiku syllable restriction makes me avoid articles.

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  6. and with these chains events form, and life goes on and on :)

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  7. Nice Haiku. I can only appreciate it but never even try it. It seems so complicated. However, I love to read Haiku composed by others.

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