Haiku
Dawn!
Opens Dawn door of dark.
Sweeps the sky clean the first gleam.
Skylark is on songs.
Noon!
At the peak of his
might, Noon keeps Earth ablaze. Breeze
lovingly strokes her.
Dusk!
Paints surroundings, Dusk
in crimson and scarlet; back
to huts are farmers.
Night!
Sea swallows Sun; in
much anguish switches
off light
And shuts her eyes, Night.
………………………………………………..sarala
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ReplyDeleteVery nice and one is able to visualise
ReplyDeletebeautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.
ReplyDeletebeautiful composition. The description of dusk is marvellous.
ReplyDeleteLike the compilation. And do remember to polish the words after writing. You may find more apt words and inclusions.
ReplyDeletePerhaps the last stanza, I guess could have been better.
And may be the "back to the huts the farmers" too could have been polished for more feel.
Please note these are my observations and i'm not an expert in poetry.
Thank you for the suggestion.I am n't that rich in lexical part.Actually my verses are odes without much thought of rhythm,beats,rhyme scheme (Of course rhyming words are there) etc.Whatever comes to the mind takes the shape of words as per time availability.In haiku syllable restriction makes me avoid articles.
ReplyDeleteand with these chains events form, and life goes on and on :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jyoti.
ReplyDeleteNice Haiku. I can only appreciate it but never even try it. It seems so complicated. However, I love to read Haiku composed by others.
ReplyDeletethank you, rama.
DeleteI love your Haiku a lot!!
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